First cut

What went well

Most of the shots we took were in focus and any camera movement was steady.

Issues

When we had edited our first cut, we found that there were a few mistakes we had made.

Timing

The timing distribution between each title was too quick, which prevented the audience to be able to read them comfortably. Because our opening sequence is too short, we hope to add in an extra scene in which we can cross cut to. This will not only make the sequence longer, but it will also give the audience a better insight to the story line.

Text

One of the first mistakes we made was with the text. The text went over two shots which is very unprofessional and looks clumsy. Also the text is too light for the shots filmed so blends in with the background. We also had comments from people who had watched the clip that the word "starring" is not supposed to be used in opening credits. 

Shots

Some of the shots we took will need re filming as the angles we used were not suitable and their were also shadows within them that shouldn't have been. In the scene where we followed josh (the main protagonist) with the camera, the camera was not held steady and therefore created a clumsy looking cycling scene.

Music

We then realised that the music we had chose for opening sequence did nit fit with the scenes. This is because the ace of the music did not match that of the protagonists cycling speed.

Improvements to make

• Remove the word 'starring' from the titles.
• Add an extra scene of the protagonist getting ready to reinforce the idea of the film being a coming of age film, and to extend the opening sequence.
• Add a short scene between when they find the research lab and the clone by filming their feet walking to ensure that the scenes look fluid
• Move the titles around or extend the shot length of one particular scene so that the film title does not appear over two different shots.
• Distribute the titles more evenly.
• Make the titles smaller.
• Record the voice over of a reporter. This will give the audience a better insight to the narrative and allow us to experiment with cross cutting techniques.

Learning comment

Throughout filming I have learnt that is important to plan the filming before you go to film as it is much easier to film shots and dialogue etc. when you have planned them using a script and story board.